so I'm trying this whole "songwriting" thing.

Alright. So I suck at writing lyrics. They always come out super corny and lame. But I wrote this last night/just now, and I feel good about it. Al said it wasnt' corny, but the rhymes were sort of lame every once in a while.

Now, I need some actual critism. Seriously. If you hate it and it sucks, tell me. Or maybe there is a particular line that just really sucks. I know they're out there... trust me. This is a huge step I am taking for myself by putting this out there on the world wide web... I'm taking huge chance that I might humiliate myself...

Anyway. Here it is. Be constructive with your criticism.

My Ghost

Verse 1:
I remember when we’d stay up all night
Or when we stared up at the stars from the roof of your car.
Like that time when I panicked and felt so alone
You knew exactly what do to; look how far we’ve come.
I knew it would be hard
but nobody could have prepped me
for what this has become.
Now it’s up to me
to be strong for us so we
can make it through this storm.

Chorus 1:
How am I supposed to deal with living my life in slow motion?
What am I supposed to feel when I'm miles away from my devotion?
I’m gonna bow my head, close my eyes and kneel; prayin’ this’ll get clearer with time.
Long enough for my heart to heal so we can make it through this storm and be just fine.

Verse 2:
I remember when we’d stay up all night
Or how we spent our first date watching Uma kill the Crazy 88.
Like those times I was there for your cure,
You turned that all around with your love, sober.
I knew what was in store
But I thought I could control
The feelings distance carries with.
Now it’s up to me
To be strong for us so we
Can make this living hell a myth.

Chorus 2:
How am I supposed to deal with so much love in the air, making me sick?
What am I supposed to feel when I'm waiting around for something else to click?
I’m gonna bow my head, close my eyes and kneel; prayin’ for the strength I seek for you.
Long enough for my heart to heal so we can make it through this storm and this’ll all be through.

Verse 3:
I know I might be complainin’
But I need to stop the pain and shame and
I thought that we could be together
I think that it is now or never

Chorus 1:
How am I supposed to deal with living my life in slow motion?
What am I supposed to feel when I'm miles away from my devotion?
I’m gonna bow my head, close my eyes and kneel; prayin’ this’ll get clearer with time.
Long enough for my heart to heal so we can make it through this storm and be just fine.

Tag:
I thought that we could be together
I think that is now or never
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I hope you didn't hate it! Let me know what I can do to make it usable!

Love.